Tuesday, September 8, 2015

REDO: Attai/Miserlian Bully Summary Response (1)

Summary Response Outline

  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
    • Bully by Lee Hirsch introduces viewers to the to horrendous truths that are present in the everyday lives of bullied children and adolescents.

  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
    • The film consists of documented footage filmed from the perspectives of five bullied children dispersed in public schools throughout the United States.

  • Explanation of ideas (example)
    • Although the subjects range from 11 to 17 years old, all of their stories reflect the influential properties that bullying can have on one’s life.
    • In some unfortunate cases, the bestial treatment of the victims was subsided by pulling the student out of school, moving to a new community, or ultimately death by suicide.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Clearly, when the reality of bullying is disclosed such as in Bully by Lee Hirsch, individuals realize the common presence and duration of bullying in modern society.


  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
    • Bully, a film by by Lee Hirsch, correctly portrays the severity of the consequences of bullying, because it can lead to depression.

  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
      • This film shows harshness of bullying through the life of many victims of bullying. The bullies do not know how much they are damaging their targets. One of these instances is presented through the experience of 16 year old female Kelby. Kelby is gay, and is not widely accepted in her community. This social rejection is most concentrated in her school in Oklahoma. She has been laughed at, criticized, and mentally abused as a result of her lifestyle (and beliefs). At one point, she cut herself and attempted to commit suicide three times. This negativity was also present in her own family until recent events proved to Kelby’s parents that her pain was only magnified in a home environment.
  • Evidence: Lead-in
    • During an interview in the film, Kelby’s father elucidates,“You don’t know what a person’s been through until you walk a mile in their shoes” (Hirsch).

    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
      • The bullies do not know the impact of their bullying until they live a day in their victim’s life. After hearing about the pain that Kelby endured inside and outside of school, Kelby’s father was aware of the issue that was present in his daughter’s life. Unfortunately, when the negative series of events spun into a fierce maelstrom, Kelby’s father not only was aware of the predicament, but experienced its darkness. At one point, Kelby’s realities entered his life, making it seem as if he was living Kelby’s life. This shows the horror and the misjudgment of bullying that is perceived through the myriad styles of shoes in the store we call life.

  • Counterclaim 1: However,
    • Set-up
      • The circumstances in which bullying is present are not always correctly portrayed in the film. When the subjects’ school and home environment are analyzed, it can be inferred from the appearances of their homes, neighborhoods, and parental behaviors that the bullied children in the film belong to the middle and lower classes. This creates a perpetual image that only children in economically lower classes are bullied. An experience from a bullied child in a higher economic class is not included in the film. This left out perspective is mentioned in an interview with one of the parents of the subjects, Kelby. Kelby’s father explains in this interview,

    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • “If a politician’s child died because he was picked on at his public school, there would be a law passed the next day” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
      • Kelby’s father makes a valid point that there are children that are bullied in more opulent families. These children normally have more parental and economic power to discontinue their treatment. This experience is not filmed in the documentary, and thus incorrectly portrays a VARIETY of experiences.  

  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? Rebuttal progression
    • A common understanding in this film is that if a son of a man with power is being bullied, there would be a fight against bullying the next day.  This seems reasonable because if the guardian of a victim is a politician, he/she will not be happy about the treatment of their minor. They will want to defend their kid and work on getting a law passed against bullying. However, most of the people that are being bullied are the children of people who do not have power. Their voice will not be heard if they try and stop bullying as shown by various efforts in the film. As a result of this, the root or roots of the conflict, the bullies, are unaware of the true pain that they are inflicting on the victims. Without the presence of superior power, the bullies proceed with their demeanors, unaware of the consequences for them and the victim. They disregard the thoughts of immorality in their actions. These events commonly subside on the rare occasion of a powerful guardian’s involvement, which in the film and in real life, is as said; very rare.

  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • In conclusion, bullying is happening in many schools today across the country, and has a negative impact on one’s life as demonstrated by Lee Hirsch in his eye opening film, Bully.

1 comment:

  1. Good summary other than the opinion words "horrendous truths". No opinion in your summary. Good work on your claim and counterclaim-

    Punctuation should look like "These events commonly subside on the rare occasion of a powerful guardian’s involvement, which in the film and in real life, is as said: very rare." Not a semi-colon


    Make sure there are no personal words.