Thursday, September 24, 2015

REDO Attai Othello Act 2 Summary Response (3)

Summary Response Outline


Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
    • Othello by William Shakespeare delves into manipulation and how its properties can be used against a victim.
  • Supporting ideas and explanations to prove main ideas
    • As conflicts rise in the play, Iago, the primary antagonist, applies manipulation through Cassio and Roderigo.
    • Throughout the story, Iago persuades both men to complete tasks that prove to have outcomes that help execute the initial steps in his revenge scheme against Othello.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Clearly, when manipulation is present such as in Shakespeare’s play, Othello, its presence can be used to change the life of another.


Response:
  • Topic sentence:
    • Othello by William Shakespeare correctly portrays manipulation because it can lead to a negative result for the victim or victims.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
      • Iago is the primary antagonist in the play. He is an ancient of Othello, Iago’s master who is also a widely acclaimed commander. After Othello selects Michael Cassio, a young and inexperienced soldier, to succeed as his officer, Iago develops a hatred for both Othello and Cassio. In his scheme to gain revenge over both men, Iago plans to intoxicate Cassio in Cyprus before his nightly guarding shift commences.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (Shakespeare 1.2.13-17).
      • Iago expands on this plan as he depicts, “If I can fasten but one cup upon him with that which he hath drunk tonight already, He’ll be full of quarrel and offense as my mistress’ dog...Now, ‘mongst this flock of drunkards am I to put our Cassio in some action that may offend the isle. But here they come. If consequence do but approve my dream, my boat sails freely both with wind and stream” (Shakespeare 2.3. 85).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim: explain quote, connect to claim
      • Iago, who is aware of Cassio’s sensitivity to alcohol, plans to convince him to drink a glass of wine before his shift. This will not only enable Iago to manipulate him, but also give Othello an additional reason to ridicule Cassio. Cassio, being very reactant to the wine, will become mentally weak upon drinking. Iago then can use Cassio’s vulnerable nature to instigate a quarrel in which he will offend the isle of Cyprus. As a result of this immoral behavior, Othello will see the need to penalize Cassio, and will thus be adventitiously beneficial for Iago by advancing his revenge plan to the next phase.
  • Counterclaim 1:
    • Set-up
      • However, Iago occasionally incorrectly portrays manipulation. One instance is when he defends Cassio in front of Othello after Cassio engages in a fight.
      • While Cassio was drunk, Roderigo initiated a cataclysm. Othello walks in on the scene and Cassio is caught in the middle of the act. Ashamed and obfuscated, he asks Iago to recall and explain the event. Instead of delivering the story in a manner that describes Cassio as the scapegoat, Iago defends Cassio’s honor.
    • Evidence:
      • Iago explains to Othello, “I’d rather have this tongue cut from my mouth than it should do offense to Michael Cassio. Yet I persuade myself, to speak the truth shall nothing wrong him” (Shakespeare 2.3. 236-239).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: explain quote, connect to claim
      • Iago supports Cassio to prove his loyalty to him, claiming he would rather be hurt than take away his honor. He speaks only to please Othello and extenuate the situation he walked into. Iago uses a more objective approach to explaining the situation and thus eliminates his manipulative tactics around Othello. Therefore, because Iago spoke to Othello directly about the situation and made no effort to manipulate Othello, manipulation is incorrectly portrayed.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? (use rebuttal progression language)
    • At first glance, one could argue based upon certain portions of the play that Iago is faithful to Cassio and that he wants Cassio to keep his position as lieutenant.
    • One can not deny that Iago defends Cassio in a public matter in front of his commander as well as explains the quarrel in such a way that would not harm Cassio. At multiple points in the story, such as the clash highlighting Cassio, Iago is withdrawn and simply observes the events. His actions do not directly start the physical conflicts.
    • However, it is more complicated than that. Iago deliberately manipulated Cassio and then acted as if he had done nothing wrong. This was to create his desired result, which is the swift removal of Cassio’s title. As a result, Othello and Cassio thought that he was trustworthy when he was really a twisted liar. Iago manipulated Cassio so that he would feel tense from his offered dosage of alcohol. The wine can be thought of as Iago. Iago’s negative influence and manipulative tactics are encompassed in the wine, and once Cassio ingests the wine, he ingests all of Iago’s negative power. He becomes Iago’s fool, and is henceforth under Iago’s control. Although Cassio’s actions are not directly controlled by Iago, his behavior in front of Othello is directly linked back to Iago himself. Therefore, Iago’s actions and words expressed in front of Cassio and Othello are all different representations of his manipulative characteristics.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • In conclusion, William Shakespeare’s Othello demonstrates the power of manipulation and how it can create a disadvantageous outcome for the targeted subjects.


Thursday, September 17, 2015

Attai/Jordan Act 2 Summary Response (3)

Summary Response Outline

Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
    • Othello by William Shakespeare delves into the power of manipulation and how its properties can be used against a victim.
  • Supporting ideas and explanations to prove main ideas
    • As conflicts rise in the play, Iago, the primary antagonist, applies manipulative tactics through Cassio and Roderigo.
    • Throughout the story, Iago persuades both men to complete tasks that prove to have outcomes that help execute the initial steps in his revenge scheme against Othello.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Clearly, when manipulation is present such as in Shakespeare’s play, Othello, its power, as discovered by readers, can be used to change the life of another.

Response:
  • Topic sentence:
    • Othello by William Shakespeare correctly portrays manipulation because it can lead to a negative result for the victim or victims.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
      • Iago is the primary antagonist in the play. He is an ancient of Othello, Iago’s master who is also a widely acclaimed commander. After Othello selects Michael Cassio, a young and inexperienced soldier, to succeed as his officer, Iago develops a hatred for both Othello and Cassio. In his scheme to gain revenge over both men, Iago plans to intoxicate Cassio in Cyprus before his nightly guarding shift commences.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (Shakespeare 1.2.13-17).
      • Iago expands on this plan as he depicts, “If I can fasten but one cup upon him with that which he hath drunk tonight already, He’ll be full of quarrel and offense as my mistress’ dog...Now, ‘mongst this flock of drunkards am I to put our Cassio in some action that may offend the isle. But here they come. If consequence do but approve my dream, my boat sails freely both with wind and stream” (Shakespeare 2.3. 85).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim: explain quote, connect to claim
      • Iago, who is aware of Cassio’s sensitivity to alcohol, plans to convince him to drink a glass of wine before his shift. This will not only enable Iago to manipulate him, but also give Othello an additional reason to ridicule Cassio. Cassio, being very reactant to the wine, will become mentally weak upon drinking. Iago then can use Cassio’s vulnerable nature to instigate a quarrel in which he will offend the isle of Cyprus. As a result of this immoral behavior, Othello will see the need to penalize Cassio, and will thus be adventitiously beneficial for Iago by advancing his revenge plan to the next phase.
  • Counterclaim 1:
    • Set-up
      • However, Iago occasionally incorrectly portrays manipulation. One instance is when he defends Cassio in front of Othello after Cassio engages in a fight.
      • While Cassio was drunk, Roderigo initiated a cataclysm. Othello walks in on the scene and Cassio is caught in the middle of the act. Ashamed and obfuscated, he asks Iago to recall and explain the event. Instead of delivering the story in a manner that describes Cassio as the scapegoat, Iago defends Cassio’s honor.
    • Evidence:
      • Iago explains to Othello, “I’d rather have this tongue cut from my mouth than it should do offense to Michael Cassio. Yet I persuade myself, to speak the truth shall nothing wrong him” (Shakespeare 2.3 236-239).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: explain quote, connect to claim
      • Iago supports Cassio to prove his loyalty to him, claiming he would rather be hurt than take away his honor. He speaks only to please Othello and extenuate the situation he walked into. Iago uses a more objective approach to explaining the situation and thus eliminates his manipulative tactics around Othello. Therefore, because Iago spoke to Othello directly about the situation and made no effort to manipulate Othello, manipulation is incorrectly portrayed.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? (use rebuttal progression language)
    • At first glance, one could argue based upon certain portions of the play that Iago is faithful to Cassio and that he wants Cassio to keep his position as lieutenant.
    • We can not deny that Iago defends Cassio in a public matter in front of his commander as well as explains the quarrel in such a way that would not harm Cassio. At multiple points in the story, such as the clash highlighting Cassio, Iago is withdrawn and simply observes the events. His actions do not directly start the physical conflicts.
    • However, it is more complicated than that. Iago deliberately manipulated Cassio and then acted as if he had done nothing wrong. This was to create his desired result, which is the swift removal of Cassio’s title. As a result, Othello and Cassio thought that he was trustworthy when he was really a twisted liar. Iago manipulated Cassio so that he would feel tense from his offered dosage of alcohol. The wine can be thought of as Iago. Iago’s negative influence and manipulative tactics are encompassed in the wine, and once Cassio ingests the wine, he ingests all of Iago’s negative power. He becomes Iago’s fool, and is henceforth under Iago’s control. Although Cassio’s actions are not directly controlled by Iago, his behavior in front of Othello is directly linked back to Iago himself. Therefore, Iago’s actions and words expressed in front of Cassio and Othello are all different representations of his manipulative characteristics.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • In conclusion, William Shakespeare’s Othello demonstrates the power of manipulation and how it can create a disadvantageous outcome for the targeted subjects.

REDO Attai Act 1 Summary Response (2)

Summary Response Outline


Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
    • Othello by William Shakespeare explores the progression of revenge through the conflicting actions displayed by the characters.
  • Supporting ideas and explanations to prove main ideas (example and explanation/elaboration of example)
    • The maelstrom of emotions expressed by main characters Iago, Roderigo, and Othello set the tone for the story’s conflicts.
    • Othello, a renown black lieutenant in Venice, made decisions that instigated conflict with Iago, a loyal ancient of Othello who desires a higher military rank, and Roderigo, a man who is desperate to regain the love of Othello’s wife, Desdemona
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • In his play, Othello, Shakespeare illustrates how these characters’ colliding actions lead to revenge throughout the story.
Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays) because ___________ .
    • Othello, by William Shakespeare, correctly portrays how one will change their identity to gain revenge, because the subtlety and unexpectedness of revenge can unexpectedly lead to the demise of another.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
      • Iago is one of the main antagonists and characters in the play. He possesses a great deal of military knowledge and skill, but is underutilized as an ancient, or servant, to the praised Othello. After a position as an officer alongside Othello was vacant, Iago hoped that he would be selected as a result of his loyalty and skill by Othello. Unfortunately, Othello gave the position to a man named Cassio, which Iago believed to be inexperienced and unqualified for the officer role. In order to gain revenge on Othello for his “misjudgment”, Iago places a “mask” over himself.
    • Evidence: Lead-in “ quotation” (       )
      • Iago discloses this information about his plan as he explains, “He holds me well. The better shall my purpose work on him...The Moor is of a free and open nature that thinks men honest that but seem to be so, and will as tenderly be led by th’ nose as asses are ” (Shakespeare 1.3 55).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
      • Because Iago has proven himself to be trustworthy and loyal to Othello, he formulates a plan to utilize a “new identity” to retaliate against the hated Moor Othello. He applies a shield of innocence over himself, completing the initial steps of his plot. He will use the good, trusting nature of Othello to hurt him in an undetected manner, which he plans will result in Othello’s downfall and lead to his succession of power.
  • Counterclaim 1: However,
    • Set-up
      • However, a change in identity to obtain revenge is not entirely portrayed correctly in the story. Iago does not conceal his true identity around Roderigo. Roderigo is a young, wealthy, and foolish man who has experienced a prolonged love for Desdemona, a Venetian woman now married to Othello. Angered by this recent development, Roderigo plans to gain revenge on Othello by winning back Desdemona’s heart while the couple is in Cyprus. This will be done with Iago’s aid.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • Iago helps develop Roderigo’s plan by explaining to him, “Put money in thy purse. Follow thou the wars; defeat thy favor with an usurped beard...It cannot be that Desdemona should (long) continue her love to the Moor--put money in thy purse--nor he his to her” (Shakespeare 1.3 51).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
      • In order for Iago to execute his plan, he requires an alliance with Roderigo. Roderigo’s wealth makes funding accessible and beneficial for him. Iago requires Roderigo’s involvement to execute his plan, so he introduces the idea of saving money “in thy purse” to help bring Roderigo out of his depressed state. In this instance, Iago does not go incognito in front of Roderigo. Iago is honest to Roderigo about what he must do and what he must remember. He speaks to Roderigo directly with his sincerity and seriousness, for he is in dire need of his ally’s help as much as his ally requires his. Because Iago dismisses his mask and presents himself to Roderigo in this state of purity, the stated necessity to change one’s identity to obtain revenge is incorrectly portrayed.


  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? (use rebuttal progression language)
    • At first glance, the use of masking and altering one’s identity is not applied in the advancement of the play. Shortcomings within the antagonist, Iago, prevent him from maintaining a selected identity as he proceeds in executing retaliation.
    • This position seems reasonable, for Iago depicts weakness in Roderigo’s presence at times. Roderigo, being as sensitive and insecure as he is, complicates Iago’s plan. Iago is the reason why Roderigo has presented such determination to win back Desdemona. Alone, Iago must place a mask over himself to execute his plan, but Roderigo’s last minute crises disrupt that transition, requiring Iago to dismiss his identity and rebuild Roderigo’s confidence. His caring, supportive nature is needed to keep Roderigo strong, so he must therefore retain his original identity and reestablish faith in Roderigo. Both of their plans rely on each other.
    • However, Iago holds back certain information regarding his true intentions for Roderigo. Although it may appear that Iago is honest and true to Roderigo, he applies a mask in front of his dear ally when he deceitfully confronts him. Iago is truthful when he convinces Roderigo to engage in certain acts, but subtly implies alternative results. From what is heard, Iago is bona fide in his words to other characters, but additional information and analytical processes show how Iago’s “good nature” is cut off by a shield that suggests otherwise. His revenge plot is reinforced by the positive reputation he has created, which allows him to manipulate others and lead them to their downfall through their trust in his new and old identities.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
Clearly, through Iago’s continuous presentations of a false identity in William Shakespeare’s Othello, readers can explore the strategic, hidden masks that one will apply to gain revenge over another.

Thursday, September 10, 2015

REDO #2 Attai Bully Summary Response (1)

Summary Response Outline


Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
    • Bully by Lee Hirsch introduces viewers to the to realities present in the everyday lives of bullied children and adolescents.


  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
    • The film consists of documented footage through the perspectives of five bullied children dispersed in public schools throughout the United States.


  • Explanation of ideas (example)
    • Although the subjects range from 11 to 17 years old, all of their stories reflect the influential properties that bullying can have on one’s life.
    • In some cases, the treatment of the victims was subsided by pulling the student out of school, moving to a new community, or ultimately death by suicide.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Clearly, when the reality of bullying is disclosed such as in Bully by Lee Hirsch, individuals realize the presence and duration of bullying in modern society.
Response:
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  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________
    • Bully, a film by by Lee Hirsch, correctly portrays the severity of the consequences of bullying, because it can lead to depression.


  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
      • This film shows bullying through the lives of many victims. The bullies do not know how much they are damaging their targets. One of these instances is presented through the experience of 16 year old female Kelby. Kelby is gay, and is not widely accepted in her community. This social rejection is most concentrated in her school in Oklahoma. She has been laughed at, criticized, and mentally abused as a result of her lifestyle (and beliefs). At one point, she cut herself and also attempted suicide three times. This negativity was also present in her own family until recent events proved to Kelby’s parents that her pain was only magnified in a home environment.
  • Evidence: Lead-in
    • During an interview in the film, Kelby’s father elucidates,“You don’t know what a person’s been through until you walk a mile in their shoes” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
      • The bullies do not know the impact of their bullying until they live a day in their victim’s life. After hearing about the pain that Kelby endured inside and outside of school, Kelby’s father was aware of the issue that was present in his daughter’s life. Unfortunately, when the negative series of events spun into a fierce maelstrom, Kelby’s father not only was aware of the predicament, but experienced its darkness. At one point, Kelby’s realities entered his life, making it seem as if he was living Kelby’s life. This shows the horror and the misjudgment of bullying that is perceived through the myriad styles of shoes in the store we call life.
  • Counterclaim 1: However,
    • Set-up
      • The circumstances in which bullying is present are not always correctly portrayed in the film. When the subjects’ school and home environment are analyzed, it can be inferred from the appearances of their homes, neighborhoods, and parental behaviors that the bullied children in the film belong to the middle and lower classes. This creates a perceptual image that only children in economically lower classes are bullied. An experience from a bullied child in a higher economic class is not included in the film. This left out perspective is mentioned in an interview with one of the parents of the subjects, Kelby. Kelby’s father explains in this interview,


    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • “If a politician’s child died because he was picked on at his public school, there would be a law passed the next day” (Hirsch).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
      • Kelby’s father makes a valid point that there are children that are bullied in more opulent families. These children normally have more parental and economic power to discontinue their treatment. This experience is not filmed in the documentary, and thus incorrectly portrays a VARIETY of experiences.  


  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? Rebuttal progression
    • A common understanding in this film is that if a son of a man with power is being bullied, there would be a fight against bullying the next day.  This seems reasonable because if the guardian of a victim is a politician, he/she will not be happy about the treatment of their minor. They will want to defend their kid and work on getting a law passed against bullying. However, most of the people that are being bullied are the children of people who do not have power. Their voice will not be heard if they try and stop bullying as shown by various efforts in the film. As a result of this, the root or roots of the conflict, the bullies, are unaware of the true pain that they are inflicting on the victims. Without the presence of superior power, the bullies proceed with their demeanors, unaware of the consequences for them and the victim. They disregard the thoughts of immorality in their actions. These events commonly subside on the rare occasion of a powerful guardian’s involvement, which in the film and in real life, is as said: very rare.

  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • In conclusion, bullying is happening in many schools today across the country, and has a negative impact on one’s life as demonstrated by Lee Hirsch in his eye opening film, Bully.

Attai/Brendle Othello Act 1 Summary Response (2)

Summary Response Outline


Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
    • Othello by William Shakespeare explores the progression of anger, betrayal, and revenge through the conflicting actions displayed by the characters.
  • Supporting ideas and explanations to prove main ideas (example and explanation/elaboration of example)
    • The maelstrom of emotions expressed by main characters Iago, Roderigo, and Othello introduces the story’s conflicts.
    • Othello, a renown black lieutenant in Venice, made decisions that instigated conflict with Iago, a loyal ancient of Othello who was not selected as his officer, and Roderigo, a man who is desperate to win the love of Othello’s new wife, Desdemona.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • In his play Othello, Shakespeare illustrates how these characters’ colliding actions advanced anger, betrayal, and revenge within the plot internally and externally.


Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays) because ___________ .
    • Othello, by William Shakespeare, correctly portrays the strategic plotting associated with one’s desire for revenge, because the complexity of revenge can unexpectedly lead to the demise of another.
  • Claim 1:
    • Set-up
      • Iago is one of the main antagonists and characters in the play. He possesses a great deal of military knowledge and skill, but is underutilized as an ancient, or servant, to the praised Othello. After a position as an officer alongside Othello was vacant, Iago hoped that he would be selected as a result of his loyalty and skill by Othello. Unfortunately, Othello gave the position to a man named Cassio, which Iago believed to be inexperienced and unqualified for the officer role. In order to gain revenge on Othello for his “misjudgment”, Iago places a “mask” over himself.
    • Evidence: Lead-in “ quotation” (       )
      • “He holds me well. The better shall my purpose work on him...The Moor is of a free and open nature that thinks men honest that but seem to be so, and will as tenderly be led by th’ nose as asses are ” (Shakespeare 1.3 55).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim
      • Because Iago has proven himself to be trustworthy and loyal to Othello, he formulates a plan to utilize a “mask” to retaliate against the hated Moor Othello. By bestowing a shield of innocence over himself, Iago secures his place in his plot. He will use the good, trusting nature of Othello to hurt him in an undetected manner, which he plans will result in Othello’s downfall and lead to his succession of power.
  • Counterclaim 1: However,
    • Set-up
      • However, the villainous properties and complexities of revenge are not entirely portrayed correctly. Roderigo’s revenge plot against Othello was practically all reliant and based on Iago and his ideas. Throughout Act 1, Roderigo continually presented his impotence regarding his revenge plan. His actions implied that he desperately desired to take away Desdemona’s love from Othello. However, his shyness and confusion reflected vagueness in regards to major aspects of his plot.
    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
      • Roderigo’s unpreparedness is displayed as Iago explains, “Put money in thy purse. Follow thou the wars; defeat thy favor with an usurped beard...It cannot be that Desdemona should (long) continue her love to the Moor--put money in thy purse--nor he his to her” (Shakespeare 1.3 51).
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim
      • As a result of his insecurity, Roderigo failed to formulate an original, strategic plot, and therefore did not present the expected stealthiness of a revenge plan such as Iago’s. He then resorted to Iago’s idea to save money in his purse and spoil Desdemona in Cyprus. He does not have a strategic plan of his own and therefore does not accurately portray the individualistic qualities of an original, strategic plot.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? (use rebuttal progression language)
    • At first glance, strong plotting techniques against Othello are not applied in the advancement of the play. Shortcomings within some of the character’s conscience prevent them from strategically scheming retaliation.
    • This position seems reasonable, because Roderigo depicts weakness as he backs away in fear at the notion of obtaining revenge on Othello.  Determination to avenge the Moor is absent as Roderigo grieves his loss after the news of Desdemona and Othello’s unexpected elopement.
    • However, revengeful actions from the characters convey strategic plotting attempts against the disliked Othello. Iago applies a mask in front of Roderigo, when he deceitfully confronts him. This shows how Iago’s revenge plot is reinforced by the cowardice of Roderigo, and allows him to manipulate him for his benefit.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • Through Iago’s despicable acts of betrayal in William Shakespeare’s Othello, the complexities of revenge are present and allow one to see how the strategic scheming of an antagonist is vital to the downfall of a foe.